The internet has changed people’s lives in many ways such as business, education, government, healthcare and even the ways in which we interact with our closed ones.
The positive side is easy and fast access to information, therefore people take the initiative on learning and master knowledge, increase the chance to find a job, communicate with customers anywhere, anytime. The internet also provides a lot of entertainment options on smartphone, television or social networks. Moreover, the internet has helped our life to be safer by inventing some smart devices such as anti-theft device, positioning device, a bulletproof vest.
On another hand, there are some negative effects from the internet to people’s lives. People spend a lot of time playing games and using social networks, leading to decrease quality of real life. For example, young people prefer to see other’s life from social networks instead of going out to make real friends, children are not equipped with necessary life skills because their parents don’t have enough time for them.
In conclusion, the internet plays an important role in changing many sides of life which improve the quality of people’s life. But this development will have a good or bad effect on life that depends on the way we are using the internet to our life.
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Some corrections:
MAJOR
The positive side is easy and fast access to information, therefore people take the initiative on learning and master knowledge, increase the chance to find a job, communicate with customers anywhere, anytime.
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On the positive, the internet allows easy and fast access to information. Thus it gives people the initiative to learn and master new knowledge, increases their chance to find a job, and allows them to communicate with each other anywhere, anytime.
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On another hand, there are some negative effects from the internet to people’s lives
On another hand, there are some negative effects from the internet ON people’s lives
People spend a lot of time playing games and using social networks, leading to decrease quality of real life
People spend a lot of time playing games and using social networks, leading to A decrease IN quality of THEIR real life
For example, young people prefer to see other’s life from social networks instead of going out to make real friends, children are not equipped with necessary life skills because their parents don’t have enough time for them
For example, young people prefer to see other’s life from social networks instead of going out to make real friends. Children are not equipped with necessary life skills because their parents don’t have enough time for them
The last paragraph is also very awkward to read. But I am going to let you work that one out yourself, as it is similar to the correction I made on your last post.
Other than that, you did make some improvements compared to your last post. So nice job 
, and good luck.
Thank you so much. You give me emotion to continue to practice my writing skill.
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